Scintillating- animated; vivacious; effervescent.
Jaguars at Bills halftime observations on ESPN.com
Roscoe Parrish has been criticized for his aversion to contact as a receiver, but he made a scintillating catch, leaping high for the ball and coming down with it despite a big undercut hit that sent him cartwheeling.
The soccer player's scintillating shot that traveled perfectly into the corner of the net from 30 yards away was the game's lone goal.
Wednesday, November 3, 2010
copy edit the world part 3
Spartan Daily article SJSU men's water polo team prepares for 2010-11 season
November 2, 2010
assion, commitment and team camaraderie have helped the SJSU water polo team fight through past struggles and gain a positive outlook towards the future, said the team’s treasurer.
In the AP Style Book, "towards" doesn't work. It's "toward."
The same year the team also had access to a huge recruiting class, with ten new freshman added to the roster.
"freshman" should read "freshmen"
In 2006 the team held a fundraising campaign and was able to easily pay off all of their league fees, Wagner said.
team is a collective noun, "their" should be "its"
Spartan Daily article: Giants win the World Series
November 1, 2010
The Giants pitching lead the major leagues with a 3.36 ERA (earned runs allowed) during the regular season, according to the MLB website.
"lead" should be past tense "led"
Spartan Daily article: San Jose Sharks beat out New Jersey Devils in Oct. 27 game
October 27, 2010
The Sharks top-line of captain and center Joe Thornton, along with wingers Patrick Marleau and Dany Heatley, took it upon themselves to get carry the Sharks out of their early season funk.
the word carry should be deleted. The sentence makes no sense.
November 2, 2010
assion, commitment and team camaraderie have helped the SJSU water polo team fight through past struggles and gain a positive outlook towards the future, said the team’s treasurer.
In the AP Style Book, "towards" doesn't work. It's "toward."
The same year the team also had access to a huge recruiting class, with ten new freshman added to the roster.
"freshman" should read "freshmen"
In 2006 the team held a fundraising campaign and was able to easily pay off all of their league fees, Wagner said.
team is a collective noun, "their" should be "its"
Spartan Daily article: Giants win the World Series
November 1, 2010
The Giants pitching lead the major leagues with a 3.36 ERA (earned runs allowed) during the regular season, according to the MLB website.
"lead" should be past tense "led"
Spartan Daily article: San Jose Sharks beat out New Jersey Devils in Oct. 27 game
October 27, 2010
The Sharks top-line of captain and center Joe Thornton, along with wingers Patrick Marleau and Dany Heatley, took it upon themselves to get carry the Sharks out of their early season funk.
the word carry should be deleted. The sentence makes no sense.
Japanese Internment Memorial Essay
1.The Japanese-American Internment was an American reaction to the bombing of Pearl Harbor in World War II. Immediately following the bombing, the FBI raided the houses of Japanese-Americans and sent them to internment camps.
2. Ruth Asawa was one of the approximately 40,000 Japanese-American children sent to internment camps. In her free time, she would draw and paint with other professional interned artists. Asawa used her experiences to her advantage, becoming one of the most decorated sculptists of all time.
3. In Japantown in San Jose, every single business was shut down because of the internment. Within the next decade, post-internment, Japanese-Americans rebuilt their businesses in San Jose.
4. At SJSU, 125 Japanese-Americans were forced to out in the middle of their education. That numbered represent more than half of all interned people in the CSU system.
The Japanese Internment Memorial shows a timeline for Japanese-Americans in America symbolized by vignettes. The vignettes show the culture that Japanese-America brought to the U.S. before they were interened. Once they were interned, the vignettes show the suffering of families broken apart. The vignettes accurately show how Japanese-Americans were void of a free life. Rather, they were trapped in an internment camp while guards in watchtowers made sure they couldn't escape. And lastly, the vignettes show that the Japanese-Americans overcame the internment and can live life freely now.
The first vignette that stood out to me was the two FBI agents forcing a Japanese-American to leave. This marked the beginning of the internment, and eventually 110,000 Japanese-Americans were forced into military areas. The American government had no evidence to suggest that Japanese-Americans were going to organize and attack the homeland, yet the FBI forced them to move anyway.
The next vignette that spoke to me was the one of two families separated by a curtain. Living conditions were inhumane, yet some Japanese-Americans made the best of them. Ruth Asawa used her free time to practice her artistic abilities. Asawa's experiences at the internment camp paved the way for a lot of her art.
The last vignette that had significance to me was the paper airplane. As Professor McCune said, things could get out, but the Japanese-Americans couldn't. I think it was a symbol of freedom for everyone but the Japanese. The effect of your freedom for an extended period of time can't be measured. The people in the internment camps lost their privilege of receiving the highest education. One-hundred and twenty SJSU students were interned. Not only did they lose valuable time for education, they might have lost their innocence of humanity as well. Overall, Japanese-Americans moved past the internment, and in San Jose, they rebuilt Japantown as if the internment never happened.
Unfortunately, I do think something like this could happen again. My trust in humanity isn't as high as I want it to be. If war is possible, then an internment can't be out of the question. After 9/11, Muslims in America faced discrimination. I fear that all it would take is one more organized attack by Muslims for American to overreact. In other countries, this type of hatrid still exists. For example, North Koreans would very likely imprison South Koreans if they entered their land.
2. Ruth Asawa was one of the approximately 40,000 Japanese-American children sent to internment camps. In her free time, she would draw and paint with other professional interned artists. Asawa used her experiences to her advantage, becoming one of the most decorated sculptists of all time.
3. In Japantown in San Jose, every single business was shut down because of the internment. Within the next decade, post-internment, Japanese-Americans rebuilt their businesses in San Jose.
4. At SJSU, 125 Japanese-Americans were forced to out in the middle of their education. That numbered represent more than half of all interned people in the CSU system.
The Japanese Internment Memorial shows a timeline for Japanese-Americans in America symbolized by vignettes. The vignettes show the culture that Japanese-America brought to the U.S. before they were interened. Once they were interned, the vignettes show the suffering of families broken apart. The vignettes accurately show how Japanese-Americans were void of a free life. Rather, they were trapped in an internment camp while guards in watchtowers made sure they couldn't escape. And lastly, the vignettes show that the Japanese-Americans overcame the internment and can live life freely now.
The first vignette that stood out to me was the two FBI agents forcing a Japanese-American to leave. This marked the beginning of the internment, and eventually 110,000 Japanese-Americans were forced into military areas. The American government had no evidence to suggest that Japanese-Americans were going to organize and attack the homeland, yet the FBI forced them to move anyway.
The next vignette that spoke to me was the one of two families separated by a curtain. Living conditions were inhumane, yet some Japanese-Americans made the best of them. Ruth Asawa used her free time to practice her artistic abilities. Asawa's experiences at the internment camp paved the way for a lot of her art.
The last vignette that had significance to me was the paper airplane. As Professor McCune said, things could get out, but the Japanese-Americans couldn't. I think it was a symbol of freedom for everyone but the Japanese. The effect of your freedom for an extended period of time can't be measured. The people in the internment camps lost their privilege of receiving the highest education. One-hundred and twenty SJSU students were interned. Not only did they lose valuable time for education, they might have lost their innocence of humanity as well. Overall, Japanese-Americans moved past the internment, and in San Jose, they rebuilt Japantown as if the internment never happened.
Unfortunately, I do think something like this could happen again. My trust in humanity isn't as high as I want it to be. If war is possible, then an internment can't be out of the question. After 9/11, Muslims in America faced discrimination. I fear that all it would take is one more organized attack by Muslims for American to overreact. In other countries, this type of hatrid still exists. For example, North Koreans would very likely imprison South Koreans if they entered their land.
Monday, November 1, 2010
IMHO #1
Title: NFL fines players left and right
On any given Sunday, you will find 22 of the most athletically gifted people in the world attempt to bruise each other on the gridiron.
The picture I'm describing is the National Football League.
I have been a fan on the NFL for years because it is a forum for bone-crushing hits, jaw-dropping runs and unbelievable plays.
But when do you decide that players are at such a high risk for injury that the game needs to be changed?
NFL Commissioner Roger Goodell has been coming down hard on players lately for nasty hits. With an influx in dangerous hits in recent weeks, fines have reached $75,000.
The NFL is under some serious scrutiny for its protection of its players. Just as boxing has lost much of its lore over the years for being too barbaric, the NFL potentially faces that same consequence.
Goodell has fined players on a weekly basis for illegal hits since he's been commissioner. I believe that he is doing the right thing by attacking players' wallets for some malicious hits that truly deserve fines.
But suddenly upping the ante to $75,000 for some hits that weren't even illegal bothers me. The Pittsburgh Post Gazette reported that Steelers linebacker James Harrison was unfairly fined for a hit that was legal. http://www.post-gazette.com/pg/10292/1096447-100.stm
I agree with Harrison, and his hit was one of many over the last couple weeks that has been wrongly fined.
Part of what makes football so great is that it is so violent. Unfortunately, players have been restricted over the last few years by rules that intend to make the league less violent.
For example, it is now illegal to hit a quarterback high (helmet area), or low (below the knees). Although these rules have the right intention, "illegal" hits are just as common as ever.
I believe the reason is the game is happening so fast that they are inevitable. I don't think fines or rule changes are acting as a deterrent for players to hit illegally.
I believe Goodell is panicking that the NFL may lose some popularity by its violence, but I don't like that he is overreacting by fining players inordinate amounts because of the pressure he is under.
Plus, some of the players who are being fined aren't hitting illegally, but the result of their hits look so bad that they are getting fined.
Ultimately, if an NFL player walks on the field with the intent to maliciously injure the opposing team, then that player should be fined, suspended, or even imprisoned.
But until we can prove the intent of such players, changing the game with ridiculous rules and raising the amounts of fines isn't going to solve the inevitbale problem that the NFL is violent.
If anything, Goodell's actions will alienate his diehard fan base, including the author of this column.
On any given Sunday, you will find 22 of the most athletically gifted people in the world attempt to bruise each other on the gridiron.
The picture I'm describing is the National Football League.
I have been a fan on the NFL for years because it is a forum for bone-crushing hits, jaw-dropping runs and unbelievable plays.
But when do you decide that players are at such a high risk for injury that the game needs to be changed?
NFL Commissioner Roger Goodell has been coming down hard on players lately for nasty hits. With an influx in dangerous hits in recent weeks, fines have reached $75,000.
The NFL is under some serious scrutiny for its protection of its players. Just as boxing has lost much of its lore over the years for being too barbaric, the NFL potentially faces that same consequence.
Goodell has fined players on a weekly basis for illegal hits since he's been commissioner. I believe that he is doing the right thing by attacking players' wallets for some malicious hits that truly deserve fines.
But suddenly upping the ante to $75,000 for some hits that weren't even illegal bothers me. The Pittsburgh Post Gazette reported that Steelers linebacker James Harrison was unfairly fined for a hit that was legal. http://www.post-gazette.com/pg/10292/1096447-100.stm
I agree with Harrison, and his hit was one of many over the last couple weeks that has been wrongly fined.
Part of what makes football so great is that it is so violent. Unfortunately, players have been restricted over the last few years by rules that intend to make the league less violent.
For example, it is now illegal to hit a quarterback high (helmet area), or low (below the knees). Although these rules have the right intention, "illegal" hits are just as common as ever.
I believe the reason is the game is happening so fast that they are inevitable. I don't think fines or rule changes are acting as a deterrent for players to hit illegally.
I believe Goodell is panicking that the NFL may lose some popularity by its violence, but I don't like that he is overreacting by fining players inordinate amounts because of the pressure he is under.
Plus, some of the players who are being fined aren't hitting illegally, but the result of their hits look so bad that they are getting fined.
Ultimately, if an NFL player walks on the field with the intent to maliciously injure the opposing team, then that player should be fined, suspended, or even imprisoned.
But until we can prove the intent of such players, changing the game with ridiculous rules and raising the amounts of fines isn't going to solve the inevitbale problem that the NFL is violent.
If anything, Goodell's actions will alienate his diehard fan base, including the author of this column.
Monday, October 25, 2010
Blog #8 Drinking Coffee Elsewhere
In "Brownies," the short story from the book "Drinking Coffee Elsewhere" by Z.Z. Packer, Packer uses quotes to personalize what is going on at Woodrow Wilson elementary. She uses anecdotes to describe whey all the girls were laughing so hard. They laughed hard because they thought the use of big words that they didn't know was funny, especially the word Caucasain.
Packer sets the scene in the first few pages piece by piece. Instead devoting a page to explaining the situation, she strings the reader along. She put in a bit about the troop girls, follow it up by talking about religion, and then she goes into how Woodrow Wilson is a school in South Atlanta that is almost entirely African American.
She uses dialogue to show what the group of girls of thinking of doing after someone of non-African American descent called another girl a nigger. The girls all give their ideas of what to do in a round robin discussion.
I like how I don't know the protagonists name after the first few pages. The only way we know the protagonist is as "snot," the name a fellow-girl gave to her when she was in the first grade, which was another anecdote.
Packer sets the scene in the first few pages piece by piece. Instead devoting a page to explaining the situation, she strings the reader along. She put in a bit about the troop girls, follow it up by talking about religion, and then she goes into how Woodrow Wilson is a school in South Atlanta that is almost entirely African American.
She uses dialogue to show what the group of girls of thinking of doing after someone of non-African American descent called another girl a nigger. The girls all give their ideas of what to do in a round robin discussion.
I like how I don't know the protagonists name after the first few pages. The only way we know the protagonist is as "snot," the name a fellow-girl gave to her when she was in the first grade, which was another anecdote.
Sunday, October 24, 2010
NPR Interview
Terry Gross interviewed Jon Stewart in September.
Terry definitely did her homework. She told Stewart what he said at one moment in his life and asked questions about it. She asked questions about Stewart's Jewish background, his view on politics and his TV show.
She would ask a general question and follow it up with a more personal question. For example, she asked a question about Stewart becoming more political through his show and followed it up with one of his serious moments on the show. Some questions were serious and some were humorous. At one point, she stopped Stewart to ask a specific question about the war in Iraq.
Terry clearly had a strategy. She kept the interview fairly fun despite many questions being very serious. Asking a question about Stewart being voted the most funny person in high school was definitely an example of asking a question to keep a light feel on the interview. Also, making fun of Stewart's athletic ability, or lack there of, kept the interview fun. Gross's job is to conduct an entertaining interview so her audience is satisfied, and I believe the mix of quesitons helped entertain the crowd.
Any evasive meaning to a question was answered with humor, which isn't surprising because Terry was interviewing a host of a comedic show.
The relationship between Terry and Jon appeared to be comfortable. Both seemed to have a lot of respect for each other.
Terry Gross taught me that you can never do too much homework for an interview. She was prepared, and that's the most important thing. Terry also listened closely to Stewart and asked several follow-up questions. These follow-up questions enhanced the interview. No amount of preparationg can replace being inquisitive and looking for moments to get a deeper, richer answer. I will look to be more attentive in my interviews.
Terry definitely did her homework. She told Stewart what he said at one moment in his life and asked questions about it. She asked questions about Stewart's Jewish background, his view on politics and his TV show.
She would ask a general question and follow it up with a more personal question. For example, she asked a question about Stewart becoming more political through his show and followed it up with one of his serious moments on the show. Some questions were serious and some were humorous. At one point, she stopped Stewart to ask a specific question about the war in Iraq.
Terry clearly had a strategy. She kept the interview fairly fun despite many questions being very serious. Asking a question about Stewart being voted the most funny person in high school was definitely an example of asking a question to keep a light feel on the interview. Also, making fun of Stewart's athletic ability, or lack there of, kept the interview fun. Gross's job is to conduct an entertaining interview so her audience is satisfied, and I believe the mix of quesitons helped entertain the crowd.
Any evasive meaning to a question was answered with humor, which isn't surprising because Terry was interviewing a host of a comedic show.
The relationship between Terry and Jon appeared to be comfortable. Both seemed to have a lot of respect for each other.
Terry Gross taught me that you can never do too much homework for an interview. She was prepared, and that's the most important thing. Terry also listened closely to Stewart and asked several follow-up questions. These follow-up questions enhanced the interview. No amount of preparationg can replace being inquisitive and looking for moments to get a deeper, richer answer. I will look to be more attentive in my interviews.
Saturday, October 23, 2010
Copy Edit the World Part 2
But Florida (4-3, 2-3 SEC) can still get to the SEC title in Atlanta if it wins its final three conference game.
Game should be games.
He's completed just 42 per cent of his passes and was missing badly on deep balls before he was benched.
per cent is one word. Percent
Game should be games.
He's completed just 42 per cent of his passes and was missing badly on deep balls before he was benched.
per cent is one word. Percent
Subscribe to:
Posts (Atom)